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The roof. The walls. Your marble floors.
I painted your windows red.

But when I struck my match to your red, red house,
You painted it instead.
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The shortest shortie that I've written, but one of my more entertaining ones, I guess. :)

la la la la

You know what is a great show? Glee.
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Short, but very nice. In fact, this is one of my favorites. You made 27 words say a lot.

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I'm glad you liked it---and counted it. 27 just happens to be my lucky number, go figure! :)


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Phew, you really did pack a lot into a very small space! Pretty darn awesome.
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Funny how the human mind works. :)

Thanks for the comments, you know they make me a happy lady :heart:


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I feel really dumb, but I can be a very literal person at times and I am not sure I understand the meaning of the poem...could you maybe give me a hint? Because I love the rhythm and the flow and the words, however the meaning for some reason just isn't traveling to me today :P

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It's supposed to be a morbid piece. Killing someone, blood, etc.

Which I hope is the gist of what you got ^^;


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Omg...that is BEAUTIFUL. No I didn't get that at all but now I totally do. Sometimes I am just too literal for my own good :P It's nothing against your writing. It's my own stupidity lol :P

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I'm glad that you like it. Sometimes when I give the actual meaning to things people flinch and are 'oh hey, this isn't as neat as I thought it was' but I'm glad that you do like it. If that makes sense!


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Be gentle with yourself. You are a child of the universe, no less than the trees and the stars. In the noisy confusion of life, keep peace in your soul. - Max Erhmann
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totally :heart:

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